Source Evaluation

Crocco, Margaret Smith. "The Road to the Vote: Women, Suffrage, and the Sphere."
Social Education. Sept. 1995: 257-264. SIRS Researcher. Web. 25 Jul 2010.

I found this article on the Sirs database. I plan to use this source in my paper because the information I found on this was relative to the topic I had chosen to write about. My topic is the women’s rights movement and this is primarily about voting and other basic rights. The source I found has a lot of great information about this journey in American history and I can use this to help me understand why the women in Atwood’s book put up with the way they were treated.

Imbornoni, Ann-Marie. "Women's Rights Movement in the U.S.." Women's Rights Movement in
the U.S: Timeline of Events (1848-1920). Information Place Database, 2007. Web. 25 Jul
2010.

This source is pretty good because it lists specific events on a timeline so I can look for key points in history and dates. I can use this sight to see what events transpired and then go into further research on the specific event at a later time.

Analysis: I researched the author, Anne-Marie Imboroni, and found out that she is a published children’s author as well as an editor. She wrote the book The American Heritage Student Thesaurus. As far as I can tell, this organization, Information Please Database, is part of an educational network so it would make sense that it would be very well edited and maintained. Because my paper is based on information that happened almost 90 years ago, it is not important that the information is kept current, since I just need dates in the past. The information on this site seemed solid, as I would use this as a reference and research the date and information and it always matched up with what other information I found. I could not find any outside factors that would make me think this source is infected with influences that might make the information less valid. From what I can tell, this source is a very good source for me to use as a reference.

Shane Webb
July 16, 2010
Laura Darrow
Topic Proposal
For my essay about a topic that relates to The Handmaids Tale, I would like to research the women’s movement in the United States. The main reason that I want to write this is during the book, it seemed that the women had no choice but to be submissive. In my history class, we briefly talked about the women’s movements and the life they had before hand. It seemed that they too had to be submissive to the men in their lives, be it their father or brother or even husband. I think my question would be why did they not stand up sooner, why did it takes long for the women of the United States to stand up for themselves against oppression. I believe this will help me understand Atwood’s book more because I feel like the women in that book are treated almost as good as the furniture, which in some cases the protagonist makes ties to how she is like furniture.

Thesis

1. A is the weaker thesis statement. It is short and not specific enough. It covers a very ambiguous topic whereas the latter one is more defined and focused.
2. Again, A is the more ambiguous and therefore weaker. The latter explains where the paper is going, whereas the first does not.
3. For once, B is the weaker thesis. It is unfocused, where A is more direct in where the paper will head.
4. A is the weaker thesis. Othello is more than just a play about love and jealousy, the first thesis does not get that point across. The second one says what the first one says, yet expounds on it and explains further.
5. A is the weaker of the two. It does not stay focused and is more than one sentence long. The second sentence says almost the same thing in a much more composed manner.

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July 9, 2010
Ms. Laura Darrow
Good Afternoon,
First and foremost, thank you for such a wonderful class. The assignments are challenging and therefore, rewarding. My biggest challenge so far has been scheduling my time for this class. I have been going out of state a lot for family and medical reasons, and also I work full time, so getting time out of the day to do school work can be nearly impossible. My goals for the second half of the semester is to pass primarily, as well as getting everything turned in on time. The readings have been very interesting, as well as challenging for me. I try not to think much about the war or war in general because I have family overseas so it was difficult.

Thank you,
Shane Webb

Response to How to Tell a True War Story

Summary v Analysis : On The Rainy River

The short story, “On the Rainy River,” is about Tim O’Brien’s experience when he got drafted. He starts off letting us know that he has never told this story to anyone, ever. He tells of himself as a young man pre-drafted and his feelings toward the war. He then starts to write and tell about when he got the letter and the emotional strife it caused him. He writes about his internal struggles with dealing with fighting and possibly dying as well as deserting and being exiled.

One day, while he was working at the local slaughter house, he feels something inside of him break. “…I felt something break open in my chest. I don’t know what it was. I’ll never know. But it was real, I know that much, it was a physical rupture…”(O’Brien, 46). He then leaves and starts to drive north but does not make it all the way to Canada. He stops at the rainy river and asks for a room at the Tip Top Lodge. After 6 days of being there, the man who gave him a room takes him fishing just by the border and O’Brien has his chance to escape. He does not take because if he did it would consider himself a coward. He then decides he must go to war.

Tim talks about himself as being a coward and that’s why he goes to war, not because he feels some sort of patriotism. He says it was the embarrassment of having to face his family and friends after running away that made him go. “I would go to war—I would kill and maybe die—because I was embarrassed not too” (O’Brien 59). I say it he was a coward anyway. He did not go to war to fight for freedom; he went because he had too. He says himself that he opposed the war. “In any case those were my convictions, and back in college I had taken a modest stand against the war” (O’Brien 41). To me it would be cowardice to stand back and let your values become compromised. Albeit, I do know it was the government of the United States’ hand that was compelling him to do it. However, post war, the deserters were pardoned by the President on their return so he would have been okay.

Responding to a Peom

After reading these poems, the two that stood out the most to me were “Letter Composed During a Lull in the Fighting” by Kevin Powers and “Rites of Passage” by Sharon Olds. These poems are very different but both of them affected me. To me the poem entitled “Letter Composed During a Lull in the Fighting” was about a war veteran writing home to his wife or his girlfriend. He is telling her how important she is to him and how much he loves her. I do not know what it is like to be in war and separated from your significant other so I will not pretend to know. However, I do know what it is like to be apart for a long period of time from loved one. Last summer, my mother had a stroke and had also developed a brain aneurysm so my family flew out to Minnesota to go to the Mayo Clinic and we were there for about four months. I know you are gone much longer when you are in the service but those four months were torture for me. I was going through a very tough time emotional with the potential of losing my mother, which I didn’t by the way, and I didn’t have the one girl that I loved there to comfort me. This is the reason why I connected to this one very strongly.

In Sharon Olds poem “Rites of Passage,” she writes about a much forgotten rite of passage, the common birthday. Her young son is the one who is having the birth day and all the other boys, along with him, are discussing their physical abilities against the younger, less advanced men. I grew up with three other brothers, two of them older. Although it was not exactly like this poem, my brothers often thought that because they are older, they could do what they wanted to me because they were, in fact, older. However, when I was getting to that stage in my life, I grew into that state of mind. I picked on my little brother who is four years younger than I am. I regret this now because he is now a couple inches taller than me and only fifteen years old.